My Presentation

I did my presentation on Monday. I think it went really well. For class engagement I decided to have everyone come up to the board and put up the year. I also passed out flyers so that the class could get a better understanding of what the ingredients are when making a Grimm's Fairytale. During my presentation, I tried to keep eye contact the entire time. I used flashcards and part of my paper to briefly talk about what Grimm's fairytales was all about. The tone of my voice I thought was very steady the entire time. I used hand gestures just so the audience could get a feel of how comfortable I was during my presentation. I saw a lot of jaws drop when I told them what really happened in the fairytales which was very good to see. It made me think that people are actually paying attention to me and that I did somewhat of a good job presenting. I think i did pretty good with my time too. Overall, the presentation wasn't as bad as what I had thought. Now, I get to relax and watch all of the other people describe their genre.

Presentations

I really enjoyed class on Wednesday. I love when a teacher grabs our attention through the media. It's one way that gets everyone focused. A teacher presents every day and Wednesday's was a great time to really bring out what it takes to get the audiences attention. My favorite advertisement was the "Tiddy Bear". It really made me laugh and just the name of it was awful. What they were trying to sell wasn't even a good idea. The last video was very clever and a great way to get the audience's attention. I want to use part of a video for my presentation next monday. I am usually a great presenter. My main key elements that I try to go by is eye contact, knowing your information well (not reading off cards), making hand gestures, and going within the time limit. You always need to maintain a loud voice so the audience can hear you clearly.  The only problem that I have specifically with this presentation is the time limit. I feel like 10 minutes is an extremely long time to present a piece of literature. I know I could possibly do present it roughly around 10 minutes but not quite. But, I would rather present my paper over writing another paper.

Cinderella

My genre was Grimm's Fairytales. My all time favorite fairytale is Cinderella. So, I decided to go with that one. The first thing that I noticed was the punctuation in the paragraphs. There are many commas throughout the sentences which end up making the sentences extremely long. There is a lot of narration in the story. The narrator I can just image that they are talking in the background and then what they are explaining the whole time is the background image. They do this throughout the entire story. The sentences are choppy. The narrator just kind of gets to the point but uses not exactly metaphors but a lot of adjectives for example: "The woman had brought with her into the house two daughters, who were beautiful and fair of face, but vile and black of heart." Which brings me to the characters. There are 3 main characters that the narrator really describes. Cinderella known as the "housekeeper" daughter and then the two other step-daughters who are beautiful but have an evil side. Cinderella is also known as being beautiful. I saw a few metaphors. The one that was brought to my attention was "Is the stupid goose to sit in the parlor with us, they said." They are referring to Cinderella as a goose who just sits back with her family and does all of the work. Those are the only types of content that stuck out to me the most when it came to reading a few short paragraphs.

Construction Worker Part 2

Tim, a 42 year old construction worker, was working on a hot spring day. He was working on a new building called Sangren. Tim has family to take care of. A wife named Sarah and his little daughter Eva, with brown hair and deep green eyes, who is 6 years old. Since Tim has a family to take care of back at home, he works hard for his money. He has an average income and the wife is a stay at home mom. On this hot spring day Tim was drilling wooden pieces together in the light brown dirt. The dirt was flying all throughout the air going with the breeze. While people hurry up and walk past the construction site so they don't get a whiff of ground dirt. Even though, it makes the campus smell like soil. Tim still worked on the pieces. His neon green shirt had stains of dirt looking like he kept wiping his black gloves all over his shirt. His Levi jeans had streaks of dirt as well. His working boots were supposed to be a tan chestnut color, but instead they kept getting darker towards the bottom of the boot from the soil. Tim stopped to take a break for a little while. He took a sip of his bottle of gatorade which was filled with faucet water instead. After taking a sip of his water, which looked like he desperately needed from all the sweat dripping down from his forehead, he was making jokes with his other construction friends. It was hard for them to communicate because it was so noisy from all of the other machinery going on. Tim and the other construction workers were cracking jokes about their job just to kill time. "I can't wait to go home and have a beer" one of his friends said. While Tim stated "You are tellin' me!" Both of them laughed and went on with the rest of their hot spring afternoon.

Observations of the Construction Worker

The person I decided to observe was a construction worker. This man had a white hat, that looked like a helmet, a bright neon green shirt, old Levi jeans, and a brown leather tool belt around his waist. This man had sweat running down his forehead. He kept getting drinks of his water. It smelt like dirt because it was all in the air. He had a drilling tool in his hand. He was drilling metal together. The environment was loud so, the construction workers were yelling to each other the whole time. I couldn't really hear the conversations but I could tell they were cracking jokes just to try and get through the hot day. The feelings I experienced was kind of felt bad for him. Not just him, but all of the construction workers. They have to wear all of that gear which made them extremely hot. The man that I was observing looked like he just wanted to hurry up and get home to take a shower. I don't really think he would be my friend because he looked like he was in his 30s. Possibly had a a little baby. It looked like he lived in a little house with his wife and his daughter. I probably would never talk to him but I know he would never approach me either. When he goes home for the day he goes home to a little white house and walks through the door with his wife trying to take care of the little baby daughter. I feel like he is always working hard and most likely always will. I feel like he gets a break when he goes to work. He is always stressed about his job and his new family. He doesn't get any credit for all of the things he does for everyone else. I just felt bad for him and you could see it in his eyes. I think all of this because just by his posture, his look, and they way he talked to people. I just felt really bad for him.

The Writing Center

I went to the writing center to help me with my research paper. I ended up helping me a lot. I was always scared to go in there. It was very intimidating. I ended up getting all the help that I needed. At first, we introduced each other. Then she asked me  what this paper was and what it was about. She then asked me to either read the paper out loud or have her read it out loud. So, I read it out loud. While I was reading it out loud we stopped at all of the problems that I had. There was quite a bit. We then fixed them with some of my ideas and some of her ideas. After, we went literally line by line and read it aloud. We fixed all of the the grammar errors. I then asked her questions that I wasn't sure of. She gave me some tips and pointers to add to my paper. For example, she said if you use a quote that is more than 40 words you need to make it it's own paragraph and single space it. From there on, you finish the sentence explaining it. Honestly, the writing center was so helpful. I am kinda upset that I didn't use it for my first paper. For the revision, I will be taking my paper to them. It' such a great source and they can help me with any type of paper that I need help with!

Showing vs. Telling

The breakfast was delicious

Waking up to the sun on a beautiful spring morning. The birds are chirping and my mother is calling my name. As I am walking down the steps, I smell homemade Belgium waffles and scrambled eggs. When I go to sit down at the table, my plate was already made. The white Victorian china plate was filled from rim to rim. Gasping as I go to take a bite of my hash browns that were steamy. I swear, it felt like I ate my whole plate within a few seconds. It filled me up for the rest of the day.